Some people believe that universities should only offer places to young students who receive high marks at school. Others think that universities should offer a place to anyone of any age. Discuss and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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disciplined & for career orientation. Some people have
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setup that
universities
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they think that if they give
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marked
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university
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placement of
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side some
universities
think that there should be minimum & maximum criteria of
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eligibility for the
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university
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then
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thinks any age or average
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to get
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university
because of high number
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for
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university
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those
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even more
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of career building of student, If they have
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a low
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score in previous
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smart
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  • academic ability
  • rigorous university environment
  • prestige
  • lifelong learning
  • diverse perspectives
  • life experiences
  • resilience
  • unique talents
  • innovation
  • dynamic classroom
  • inclusive classroom
  • mentorship
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