Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation.

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sometime
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thought that it is good to receive
bad
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situation
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for example
unsuitable
job
or shortage of money and
other
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others
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feel that it is better to change
this
situation
.In
this
essay
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I agree that individuals should try to improve their condition. Nowadays
in
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personal
life
and
work place
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is
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not good enough for individuals for
this
many
people
suffer more.It is crucial for
people
to satisfy their
job
because if they are unwilling to do
work
they lose their
work
.It is not possible to make sure for everyone to find
appropriate
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job
and enough money.If they do not
work
they might be
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drop
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from
work
and
lost
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their
job
so it is better to continue the
job
.
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result
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they might not lose
their
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interest
from
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earning money, and it
help
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them to avoid different types of criminal activities.
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shown
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that those
people
who carry their
work
they
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lead a healthy
life
and they
are not worry
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about their
life
.So it is important to continue the
work
and
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should
shoud
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should
satisfy their own condition.
On the other hand
,
people
should try to change their condition.There have so many works and
opportunity
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opportunities
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,
people
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and people
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should take
these opportunity
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to improve their
situation
. Naturally, hard
work
can create
such
facilities of
life
standard, which is not able to find
from
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other sources.It can be significant for a nation as well.It is known to all that living
in
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a standard
life
is a precious
things
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that
on
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no
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one wants to make it worst.According to
survey
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the survey
a survey
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, it has been shown that
,
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a lot of
people
around the world live a balanced
life
as a result
of hard
work
, which eventually makes them happier and
satisfied
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in their
life
in the long run. It is clear that
,
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it is
good
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idea for
people
to improve their
situation
.
As a result
of
this
individuals feel better, as well as their country's development will be ensured.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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