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Some people think that news has no connection with people’s lives; so it is a waste of time to read newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #connection #people’s #lives #waste #time #newspapers #television #programs
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What is going on in the
world
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 around us has always been important to most
people
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.
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,some
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 opine that it is just a waste of time and has no actual significance whatsoever.I would advocate the importance of connectivity of
people
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 to the news around them because well-informed
citizens
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 may take better
decisions
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 not only for their country but
also
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 for their families.
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,well-informed
citizens
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 are an asset to the nation.The fate of countries falls into better hands when its voters are well informed about the developments in their country and the
world
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.
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in
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apply
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first-world
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first
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world
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 countries where
citizens
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 are well-informed usually chose better leaders which in turn leads to a better future
of
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 their nation.
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, the fate of the nations may be dependent on the connection of its subjects with the developments in the
world
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 around them.
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,well-connected
people
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 to the
world
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 tend to take better life
decisions
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.They know better how things work in the
world
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such
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 as if a family is up to date about the economical situation in the
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then
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 they may take better financial
decisions
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.
Hence
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 life
decisions
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 are much easier and better for well-connected
people
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 with the news. To summarise,highly connected
citizens
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 mean informed
decisions
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 for the family as well as the nation.In order to progress in the
world
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,
citizens
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 must have a sound knowledge about the ongoing developments in the surrounding
world
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.
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