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In some countries, using internet in schools is getting more popular. Is this a positive or a negative development?

#countries #internet #schools #development
Nowadays a lot of schools use
internet
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 for learning purposes. There are different opinions about
this
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. In my view, we can see
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it
like
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 a great
opportunities
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 for
pupiles
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pupils
. In
current
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essay
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In
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internet
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 for their
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 and it seems very reasonable. Because
,
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pupiles
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pupils
 are so young for right understanding
neccesary
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necessary
 borders of using
internet
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the internet
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. They can think that
internet
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 is some kind of
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entertainment
enterteinment
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entertainment
 with plenty of games, funny pictures, social networks and
video
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videos
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 about everything. Without setting some rules, children can even
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harm
hurm
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hurt
youself
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yourself
 and get
addiction
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.
In
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 the other hand,
predominant
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the predominant
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 goal for each school is
giving
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 the
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young
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youngs
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young
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 set of
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templates
templetes
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 and methods for the
next
 steps of studying. Obviously, that important skill for each level of
educations
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 is
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serving
surfing
serfing
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surfing
in
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on
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Internet
Enternet
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Internet
 and
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quickly
quikly
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quickly
 finding what you need.
Moreover
, nobody can
not
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imagine modern life without
this
 development and you need to be able to use it
right
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 way. It is comfortable, absolutely
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useful
usefull
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useful
 and sometimes vital.
For example
, if you need to prepare
a
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research work with
strict
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 deadline, you need
too
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 read
dozens
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 books and find previous research
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.
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, significant
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