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Some people believe that employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #employers #employees #dress #quality #work
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Ryemouth
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Eyemouth
 village has been developed since 1995. Overall, the village has gotten more urbanized and the whole fishing industry is removed. In 1995, to the northeast of the village, there was a vast farmland and forest park located in the south of it. There were various housing
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 the northwestern side, alongside the main
road
. There were shops and fish markets by the sea in the south, across the fishing port. A hotel and a cafe were situated in the southeast alongside the
road
, where the main
road
 is crossed with the coastal
road
 in a T-intersection.
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, multiple changes can be seen in the present. Farmland and forest park are replaced by a golf course and tennis playing court. As you can see, the fishing industry is completely gone, lots of accommodations are built in the west and apartments replace fish markets.
Fishing
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 port is removed by the sea and shops have been turned
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 restaurants.
Hotel
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 and cafe have remained unchanged, a car park is added beside the hotel though.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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