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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

#scientists #future #humanity #language
Several types of languages are sources of barriers in humanity in different aspects.
We as
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 human beings, communicating is a very fundamental thing where we can improve in various ways.
For example
 socially, economically and politically. Living in a
high
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 technological society, our world has been converted
to
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 a global village. But
unfortunately
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 there is still
this
 barrier of languages. Some countries still are not willing to talk any other foreign
language
. The only
language
 used is the native one. For foreigners
invetsing
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investing
 in
such
 countries are very difficult.
Firstly
,
foreign
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a foreign
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businessman
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businessmen
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 need to hire a person to translate all
conversation
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conversations
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 with the locals. It is not necessary that the translator communicates the right information. Very often
businessman
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businessmen
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 are
being
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disappointed because
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at
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 the end , the result is below their expectations. Another cause is the ràte for a translator is very costly and some information might be confidential,
where
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 people from different countries would be more at ease if they can communicate rather with
same
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language
. Gradually with the introduction of various applications on the internet,
either
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people on a business trip or on
holiday
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 voyage
,
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 managed to find a way to converse in a
language
 different to
them
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. To conclude, it is quite impossible to have a global
language
. Some languages are aged more
than
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thousands
years
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of years
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still
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 are being used. But there are various ways to overcome these barriers.
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