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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some People believe that new railway lines should be built for trains with high speed between cities .Others argue that the budget should be spent on maintaining and progressing public
transport
.Despite the fact that improving public
transport
 is more important, I feel that some new
railways
 can have more benefits.
This
 essay would discuss both attitudes in the following. The government should upgrade the existing Public
transport
.
This
 method requires less money to improve, there here it is more reasonable and
also
 more economic. Improving public
transport
 needs ,a few times and can affect very soon in society.People get used to
use
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using
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 the existing
transport
 which they do not need to adopt a new one.
For example
,they know about how they should buy tickets or where are the stations in the city,
thus
 they prefer to move by them. New public
transport
such
 as fast trains should be utilized. The researches indicate that the expense of maintaining
this
 kind of is the least.The
railways
 just should be installed one time and
then
 work for more than 20 years.
Moreover
, they have no harm hazard effects on the environment.
For instance
,
railways
 are made of steel and can be recycled easily.
In addition
, they have no air pollution. They are so fast ,
thus
 passengers can reach from one place to another place so rapidly. they are able to go
with
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at
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speed
Correct article usage
a speed
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 of 150 km per hour compared to other
transport
, which can not go with more than 120 km per hour. The statistics demonstrate. They have had no accidents since 10 years ago ,
therefore
 they are so safe. To conclude, the government can construct new
railways
 or improve existing public
transport
. To me, establishing a new
transport
 is more reasonable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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