Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly nagetive impact on local inhabitants and the environment, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

In recent years, young people have been gradually having an independent lifestyle. They like to discover new horizons which are different from their family.
Therefore
, they try to escape from their family to find freedom by renting or sharing a rented house with their
friends
.
This
fact brings both positive and negative advancement to
youngsters
. In some cases,
teenagers
become more mature when they leave
from
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the arm of their parents.
This
is because they do not have anyone to depend on, while at home, they are taken care
seriously
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by their parents. Of course, being outside their home,
youngsters
may face
with
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difficulties.
However
, they would be stronger after getting over their obstacles.
For example
, as long as young people get sick, they have to meet
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by themselves and study how to take care
themselves
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of themselves
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effectively in the future
instead
of waiting for
some
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help from their
mother
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.
In contrast
, the freedom lifestyle can make
teenagers
suffer from dishonest guys.
In other words
, they are too young to realize the tricks of the gangsters which make
friends
with an aim to make advantage of
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and fortune of
friends
. These bad guys can destroy the future of young people by encouraging
youngsters
to be victims of
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, alcohol, and criminals.
For instance
, gangsters can hire
teenagers
to sell goods without giving full information about the product. To conclude, leaving
from
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the family can bring advantages and backwards to
teenagers
. Obviously, they would scope with difficulties during the early days, but they would get a better future. As far as I am concerned, it is very important to choose
friends
when
youngsters
have
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independent lifestyle.
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