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Some people think that news has no connection with people’s lives; so it is a waste of time to read newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals think, spending time reading and watching the
news
 is waste of time and does not create any positive impact on
people
’s lives. In my way of thinking, I would say
this
 is a wrong statement because it helps
people
 to know about the world,
people
, and society.
Firstly
, reading or watching the
news
 certainly improves knowledge significantly.
Moreover
, many governmental exams are based on
this
 kind of previously published newspapers or magazines.
Although
 many
people
 consider it a waste of time, it makes them aware of many scams, health issues, etc.
For instance
, recently many scammers have stolen money from
people
’s bank accounts by pretending
as
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to
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a legitimate bank employees
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a legitimate bank employee
legitimate bank employees
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. Media houses nowadays are more concentrated on the stock market
as a result
, many individuals who were investing money in stocks have gotten lifted up.
However
, weather forecasting
news
 plays a major role in everyone’s life because it lets
people
to
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plan their schedule
accordingly
 to the weather.
For example
, a man in the middle of the ocean can get to know the wind speed, rain, etc on the radio. I would argue that
,
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 either reading or watching the
news
 is an essential thing for
people
 who want to expand their knowledge. on top of that, it positively impacts the
people
 to know about business, lifestyle, weather etc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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