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Space exploration is a waste of money. Agree or disagree?

#space #exploration #waste #money
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 agree about that statement,
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share
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information
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much information
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possible in scientific
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 freely is good for the improvement of
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society
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. Someone had said “
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 is the
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 the planet”, from that quotes
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 believed
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 can bring some major improvement
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society
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. Because the more people can access the
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 paper the more people can improve their
life
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. The more people improve
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, the more
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 can
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improved
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. Meanwhile,
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information
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possible or we called it
education
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Education
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 become human
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 in
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 age. Because of that, all
human
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humans
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 need to access
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 about anything freely.
Education
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 is basic
needs
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being
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possible is the key
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 safe human
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From the
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information
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 that they consumed, it can bring
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new opportunity
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 their lives.
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 can be improved with small little things which means is
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 everyone. So everyone can
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 their own thought
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 the development of the
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 the end of the day, because
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being
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 can access all the
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 of scientific
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human
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humans
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 can develop some critical thinking. Critical thinking is a basic to improving
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possible is a basic human
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. Human
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 need to consume more knowledge from scientific
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 so because of that
human
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humans
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 can
survived
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 in the modern world.
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possible was the key
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 having a safe
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 need more scientific
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 their
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. From
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that
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published
human
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 can read
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about the new trend
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 the world. It can bring
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new opportunity and
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human being. The conclusion of
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getting
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 more open
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 about scientific
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improved
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humanity after all and
became
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 the best species in the world.
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