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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is widely argued that governments in all countries should gain a great number of
people
's wages for public infrastructure like roads or transport
facilities
 as well as education.
Although
 it is true that social
members
 have to pay
taxes
 to improve public amenities, others consider that taking a large proportion of one's income as a tax can be considered a negative issue. On one hand, it is quite important to improve public
facilities
 and have easy access for all social
members
, and to achieve
this
 goal, government authorities should impose a great amount of
taxes
 based on public income. It can be considered a decisive factor to reduce the gap between wealthy and poor
members
 of societies. It might give poor
people
 opportunities to be benefited from free educational
facilities
 and find their talents to improve their lifestyle and their society as well.
Besides
, it is may be caused by redistributing wealth among social
members
. Totaly, recent research findings confirm that the higher the
taxes
 the more the
facilities
 and
consequently
 the more the welfare, it was approved in more developed countries.
On the other hand
, The high proportion of
taxes
 can be estimated as negative attitudes.
Firstly
, it makes
people
 disappointed with hard work. Everyone has to work hard to improve their lifestyle and accommodate their needs and their family's desires, by taking a large percentage of their incomes, acting as a destructive factor and stopping them.
Secondly
, it might be cheating among
people
, companies and entrepreneurs to find a way to escape from
taxes
 and hide their incomes;
hence
, it could be increased the level of crime and wealth gap and
consequently
 the number of poor
people
 increases dramatically. In conclusion. I am convinced that, the acceptable range of
taxes
 not only improves countries' infrastructures but
also
 decreases the wealth gap and makes a happier society.
Submitted by famana on

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