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Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it is popular and how does it affect society?

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some people said that watching
television
 programmes and
movies
 related to crime are popular in my point of view watching
television
 programmes and watching
movies
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 so much in our societies by improving the standard of human thinking . watching
television
 helps in learning and
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 information about what happening in the world. and how to communicate,
also
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daily life which teaches us different languages and cultures in the world .
firstly
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 that watching
television
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 you can get all the necessary information by watching
television
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even
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that
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 happening.
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 watching
movies
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improve
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 the way of learning different language and culture and
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 tribes. but in the case of crime watching some
romanctic
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romantic
 and war
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 some of our children act abnormal and mishave
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 to the kind of
movies
 they are watching but in
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because
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 improved that you select and hide what parent
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 their children to view to reduce viewing some erotic movie. in
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 watching
movies
 and
television
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improve
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 the way we live our life and learning of other culture and languages .
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