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Online education and training is becoming increasing popular in business world. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage

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In the modern world, the number of training classes through
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 has been increasing in
business
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 environment rapidly. There are significant merits in
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 new method,
however
, there are certain drawbacks
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 as well. I would like to compare both and
finally
 state my opinion that the benefits outweigh the demerits. The
first
 advantage of
trainings
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 online is its flexibility. Employees can access
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the training sites from anywhere and anytime.
For example
, even when they are in
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head quarter
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, they can attend the training session without commuting long hours. As
such
, even under
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 the recent pandemic, new members of the company could learn jobs remotely. The
second
 merit is to be able to access
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the highest quality lessons through the internet.
For instance
, in the past, the top educator could train only a limited number of employees at one time,
however
, through the web, they can teach a number of learners at once.
Furthermore
, they can access
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the highest quality
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resources all over the world. These are the major advantages of online lessons.
On the other hand
, there are a few disadvantages as well. The main ones often discussed are lack of interaction between the lecturer and the learner, which results in missing
sabtle
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 understanding of
employee's
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employees'
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 needs.
Moreover
, the lack of physical
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 may
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 in less synergy creation between the learners.
For example
, bonds between colleagues are difficult to be incurred through the internet. All
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, I believe these advantages are easily compensated
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 activities separately. In conclusion, I believe the benefits of online learning in work environments
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 the disadvantages. The method provides precious flexibility to both lecturers and learners and it
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possibility
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 of accessing the top quality resources requiring minimum efforts on both sides.
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