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Some people believe that it is more common way to learn history by watching movies instead of reading books. Does the advantages of this ought weight the disadvantages?

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Many
people
 prefer to study the history of
people
 through movies rather than through
books
. It is useful for the study of history. I fully agree with
this
 opinion and give reasons. On the one
hand
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 a component of movies helps
people
 to understand their local accent or pronunciation. Perhaps the best way to do
this
 is to make it easier for us to understand the dialogue between characters in historical films. If we take Navoi's novel as an example, in the book
this
 novel is written in very incomprehensible historical terms. Reading the book is a bit more difficult to understand, but not so in the movie. By watching the film, it will be easy for us to learn about Navoi's life. All the
words
 in the movie are very easy and convenient for us to understand.
On the other hand
, reading
books
 has several disadvantages.
First
 of all, the
words
 in
the
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historical
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books
 are not applicable
in
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 our modern life today. Even if we use our historical
words
, no one will understand and understand those
words
.
Secondly
, while learning some historical
books
, we come across difficult and incomprehensible
words
. We use different dictionaries to find
this
 word.
for example
, as I mentioned above, there are many difficult
words
 in Navoi's novel. In conclusion, most
people
 prefer to learn history by watching movies rather than reading
books
. Because in the movie, all the
words
 are used clearly and comprehensibly compared to the
books
.
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