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Many people believe that schools should teach to become good citizens and workers rather than independent individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #schools #citizens #workers #individuals
Education is the most vital
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 and most important thing in our country,
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school
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 are training the citizen to become better and better in the country and
than
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 becoming
independent
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an independent
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individual
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individuals
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 in our society. it is
uncomparising
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uncompromising
comprising
 and quite different to compare with educated and
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uneducated
uneducacted
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uneducated
 once in the
world
 now.
school
 teachers are really training the citizen to improve
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their economy and technology.
school
 at
this
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 us the
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 of learning
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language
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language
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culture.l
therefore
 developing the city and building the
world
 in a
stardard
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standard
 way and bringing
eletricity
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electricity
.
Firstly
 the economy is the most important in our societies these days because we learn how to trade and do proper business in the
world
.is very important to attend
school
 to learn more about business
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 know how to read and write.
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 in
school
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 you learn how to communicate well and how to speak in
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public
therefore
 is important for one to attend
school
. talk of electricity as of today is
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 we learn in
school
 and building of
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airplanes
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air planes
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aeroplanes
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 is are important of
school
.
lastly
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 even the older ones who
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 not able to attend
school
 are now going to evening
school
 to improve their self and
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 period of time that we are now in
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world
 and every business is going online and technology.so is
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every
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 important to have computer
knowlwdge
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knowledge
 and be educated. to sum it up is very important that
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everybody
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every body
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need
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 to
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attend
attent
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attend
school
 to enable one
know
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 the wrong and
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right in
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society.
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