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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#programs #popularity #people #courses #college #university #person
In recent times, learning through online
courses
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However
, many individuals claim that online
courses
 are not as effective as those taken at
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institution
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. In my opinion, I agree with the notion that distance-learning programs are not convenient as
offline
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 learning
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methods
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. To commence with,
growing
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 number of
students
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online
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internet
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 which is mostly happening as technological advancement. At present, numerous
courses
 are available
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 are offered by various
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 or e-learning platforms
such
 as Coursera, Udemy and Skillshare. Apart from that benefits online lessons
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mostly depends on theoretical concept rather than practical lessons. For practical
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students
 have to attend their
classes
 at college or university. Lack of concentration is another reason for those who
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campus
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classes
 would be
fruitful
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 than distance learning.
In addition
, we
also
 notice that in
classes
 through
internet
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 where interaction between teacher and
students
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Moreover
,
courses
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at
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university
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universities
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 or
college
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colleges
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 where pupils can learn
properly
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more properly
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 than online
classes
. In order to achieve excellency
students
 have to obtain practical
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cognizance
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proper
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 materials. Though e-learning is
time saving
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 there are
also
 several drawbacks.
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campus
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classes
 are appropriate for all
students
 and they can gain
proper
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 education.
Thus
, offline learning through
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system
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systems
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 is comparatively more effective even though distance learning efficient. In conclusion, because of cutting-edge technology e-learning has become more common.
However
this
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 feasible as traditional
classes
. From my perspective, I completely concur with the statement that
courses
 which are operating
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 institutions are more
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.
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