Some people think that television has destroyed communication among friends and family. In what extent do you agree or disagree

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At present, some
people
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believe that
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has ruined communication between
friends
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and family. In my opinion,
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personally disagree because when
people
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watch
tv
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they can be enjoyed and
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find out about the latest news.
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of all,
people
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can select
the
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different ways
for
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recreation after working. Watching
tv
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is one way to entertainment after
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. When
people
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watched
tv
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and that time they
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friends
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and
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relatives
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.
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, when the world cup starts
people
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gather together and watch their
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game and when their country with the game or
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become
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champion,
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people
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will go out and celebrate. If
friends
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and
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family like watching the same programme they can understand most of each other
interest
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better.
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, television
provide
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educative shows
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which
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wich
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which
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are
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truly beneficial for the communities,specifically for students and scholars. Some of the shows are national geographic channel,discovery or animal
planets
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wich
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educate
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the public regarding
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wildlife and natural science they gain knowledge.
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many
people
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watch
news
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the news
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on
tv
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and get a lot of information from it.
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, a few days ago
people
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came to know about the effects and prevention of coved 19 various from the news. To
concluded
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,
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believe that television help family relationship with
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.
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is because it is a great source of information and enjoyment as
people
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come together when watching
tv
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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