The money by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some individuals suggest that the
government
disbursement should be spent on public services including schools and hospitals, instead
of space
exploration. Although
space
programs can bring enormous achievements, i
agree that the Change the capitalization
I
government
should invest in civic assistances
that benefit us all.
The reason why spending on hospitals and schools is Fix the agreement mistake
assistance
worthy
is that it assists to improve Replace the word
worthwhile
the
living conditions. Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, education is a foundation for the welfare and development of a country. Therefore
, spending on education
system is Add an article
the education
underlying
stepping stone for Add an article
an underlying
the underlying
qualified
and strong Correct article usage
a qualified
labor
force. Change the spelling
labour
Secondly
, if the government
does not step in to develop healthcare , the medical services will be degraded, which threatens the citizens
health, and even causes rising dead-toll. Change to a genitive case
citizen's
citizens'
For example
, in many countries, the government
tends to invest the
money in infrastructure and superior technology, Correct article usage
apply
this
will indirectly weaken the medical and educational systems, leads
to Wrong verb form
leading
widely
illiteracy and deadly cases due to the lack of medical facilities.
The very reason Change the word
widespread
for
those believing that Change preposition
apply
space
programs should be stopped is that it requires large
amount of money. Change the article
a large
In other words
, if the government
focus on illusionary space
business, it will have negative
impact on the citizen’s benefits. Add an article
a negative
This
means, the government
disbursement becomes exhausted, and the citizen’s living quality will not be guaranteed, resulting in the
rising number of dead-toll every day. Another reason is that the healthcare assistance and the resident’s life will be degraded. As proof, the state budget in Japan has been Correct article usage
a
weaken
seriously after investing in a fruitless Change the verb form
weakening
weakened
space
project, which means the homeless cannot be provided basic
necessities
In conclusion, many people argue that Change preposition
with basic
government
disbursement should be invested on
vital public services rather than Change preposition
in
space
exploration. In my opinion, i
agree with the view that Change the capitalization
I
educational
and healthcare systems should be a priority in Replace the word
education
the
society, and Correct article usage
apply
space
project
should be limitedFix the agreement mistake
projects
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