Some cities create new housing for their growing populations by constructing a small number of high-rise buildings. Other cities create more of low-rise buildings. Which solution is better, in your opinion?

Some towns construct new dwellings for their rising population by building a few
number
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of skyscrapers
on the other hand
some
cities
create numerous low-rise
buildings
. In my view, the former solution will suit the
cities
, and the reasons for my opinion shall be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, skyscrapers are
well planned
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constructions
construction
contructions
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constructions
which provide all basic amenities under one roof. To elaborate, the high-rise
buildings
facilitated
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by centralised cooking gas
connection
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,
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electricity
eletricity
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electricity
,
generator
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, water, etcetera.
In addition
, it is offered
with
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recreational activities like
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swimming
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a swiming
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swiming
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swimming
pool, Gymnasium, library, sports courts and so on.
Moreover
, high-rise apartments have residential associations which will cater
all
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needs of its
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residents
reisdents
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residents
as well as it will organise cultural events, which will improve harmony and bond
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among
amoung
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among
residents.
Furthermore
, high-rise
buildings
consume only
meagre
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area
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for construction, and it will
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accommodate
accomodate
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accommodate
plethora
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a plethora
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of
family
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families
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in the building.
For instance
, hectic
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metropolitan
meteropolitian
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metropolitan
cities
like Delhi, where the population density is very high
depends
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on skyscrapers for
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accommodation
accomodation
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accommodation
. To conclude I
favours
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the
first
solution of building
few
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a few
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high-rise
buildings
rather than numerous low-rise
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buildings
builidings
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buildings
. Because it will
saves
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space in the
conjested
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congested
cities
and offers good facilities under on roof.
Furthermore
, it will boost harmony
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among
amoung
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among
dwellers.
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