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Some people think that the government should strictly control the supply of fresh water, as it is a limited resource, while others it should not be regulated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Fresh
water
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 is becoming a scarce resource across the
world
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due to
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 the increase in population and urbanisation. It is frequently argued that the supply
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 fresh
water
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 should be curbed by implementing policies and strategies by
governments
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 .
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, certain
people
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 believe that it should not be controlled.
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 my opinion. First off,
governments
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 should implement strategies to
control
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 the supply of fresh
water
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 like increasing the tax, price or
limit supplying
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 of
water
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.
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 would help countries to reduce
wastages
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 and
people
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 with unlimited
water
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 supply might
undertstand
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understand
 the importance of
water
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due to
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this
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control
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, almost 40% of the
fresh
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freshwater
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water
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are
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 used for livestock farming and large
corporations
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.
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,
general
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 public
tend
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 to have less
water
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 for their day-to-day lives.
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, when
governments
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 start to
control
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 the
water
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, it may create a monopoly situation all over the
world
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. Certain political parties may exploit
this
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 opportunity to rule the country for
a
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 foreseeable future.
On the other hand
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, when
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
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 is not controlled by the
governments
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,large amounts of
water
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 could be wasted. Generally,
people
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 will not understand the importance of essential resources when they are in
abudanance
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abundance
.
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,
this
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 would lead to
water
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 shortage in
few
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a few
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 decades across the
world
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.
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 ,
general
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the general
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 public and
corporations
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 may use
water
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 without a limit and certain parts of the
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is
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are
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 becoming
as
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apply
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a waste or dry land. Those lands cannot be used to grow plants or trees.
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 may lead to food
shortage
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shortages
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in the long run. In my opinion, fresh
water
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 should be controlled
to
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by
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 certain
corporations
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 and
large scale
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 livestock farmers who waste huge amounts of
water
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 for their production process . Recent studies revealed that if the amounts of
water
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 used by these large companies are controlled, it may save 40% of fresh
water
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 every year.
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, It is important to impose
control
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 on
people
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 or
corporations
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 responsible for the wastage.
To conclude
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,
water
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 wastage is high all over the
world
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, it could be controlled by enforcing tight controls on
people
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 and companies responsible for large
water
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 wastage since when the
water
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 is not controlled,
people
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 will not understand the importance of the natural resource and it may
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become
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 inaccessible for many
people
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 around the
world
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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