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The prison system has not been effective at reforming criminals. A large number of convicted felons return to committing crimes soon after being released. What are the problems with the prison system and what solution can you recommend to address this issue?

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 system has proven to be ineffective at
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 of criminals. It has been observed that a majority of convicted felons turn towards the world of crime as soon as they are released from
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. One of the possible causes of
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 problem can be the inside environment of prisons. The harsh behaviour of
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 guards towards the
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 can create negativity inside them for others.
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, in prisons, the prisoners are surrounded by other criminals at all times,
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 does not allow them to change. In my opinion, these problems can be addressed by organizing regular counselling sessions for prisoners. I believe that through
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these sessions, the
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 will be able to remove the negative thoughts or feelings from their minds.
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, some laws should be enforced to ensure that
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 guards should not take undue advantage of the
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. These laws should
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 ensure that the guards are not being partial to any of the
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. In conclusion, I believe that how the criminals are being treated inside the
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 plays a crucial role in their journey of reformation.
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, certain legal steps should be taken to ensure that
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prisoners are not being treated badly inside prisons. I am certain that regular counselling sessions for the
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 can be a key solution to most of these issues.
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