You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? Use specific details and examples to support your answer. Write at least 250 words.
Due to the increasing population all over the world,
people
are moving to villages to live. It is often argued that new houses should not be built in villages for many reasons. I completely disagree with this
assertion, house is a basic essential need of humans
, they
should be able to live in any location.
Correct word choice
and they
First
of all, humans
cannot only live in urban areas
due to high
cost of living and Correct article usage
the high
pollution
.Most cities
are expensive to live,
Remove the comma
apply
since
there Change preposition
in since
are
high demand for basic needs Change the verb form
is
such
as shelter, food and healthcare. For example
, London is the
one of the most expensive Correct article usage
apply
city
in the world, Change to a plural noun
cities
therefore
many people
tend to live in suburbs
of London and visit London for their employment. Correct article usage
the suburbs
Further
, cities
have high pollution
when compared with countryside
. Add an article
the countryside
For example
,
Delhi has the highest air pollution
in the world. This
is mainly due to large
population. Correct article usage
the large
Therefore
, people
should be allowed to live in countryside
as it is not practical to live in Add an article
the countryside
cities
anymore.
Secondly
, humans
have an opportunity to connect with nature when they live in remote areas
. Nowadays people
want to live in remote areas
as they create a peaceful environment among people
.
For instance
, IT professionals are moving to remotes
Change the noun form
remote
areas
in
en masse and shifting their jobs from IT to agriculture. They believe that they may have a peaceful life in remote Change preposition
apply
areas
while connect
themselves with nature. Change the verb form
connecting
Further
, remote areas
have less pollution
and fresh water, this
may enhance Correct pronoun usage
which
a
Correct article usage
the
Correct your spelling
healthy
healthly
lifestyle of the Correct your spelling
healthy
people
. Recent studies shows
that Change the verb form
show
people
feel less stressful
and tensed when they live in remote areas
. Hence
, countryside
living promote
additional benefits to Change the verb form
promotes
the
Correct article usage
apply
humans
. However
, people
should live without harming wildlife and the
nature.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
people
can live in countryside
since everyone cannot live in Add an article
the countryside
cities
due to pollution
and high
cost of living. Correct article usage
the high
Moreover
, living in remote areas
provide
many benefits Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
such
as
peaceful
life , Add an article
a peaceful
Correct your spelling
healthy
Correct word choice
and healthly
healthly
lifestyle. Correct your spelling
healthy
However
, people
should learn to live in countryside
without affecting wildlife and other Correct article usage
the countryside
habitants
.Correct your spelling
habitats
Submitted by Jay_Practise on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.