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Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world's meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world's meat consumption? What kinds of problem might such mesures cause?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
 are starting to be vegetarian or even vegan, which has not only a positive impact on the carbon footprint but
also
 on
land
 use.
Meat
 production needs much more
land
 than crop production because for the animals we need the
land
 to grow the crops that will afterwards be given to the animals, which
also
 need a lot of space for their living. It is
therefore
 agreed that
meat
consumption
 should be enormously reduced. In
this
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 I will analyse the educational impact and the vegetarian
alternatives
 to
meat
.
First
 of all,
people
 need to get proper education about
this
 subject.
People
 need to be educated about the current problems, in order to start caring about them and changing their eating behaviour.
For example
, many
people
 don't even know about the problems of
meat
 production, so we can't blame them for eating
meat
,
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 if they like the taste of it. If society would put more attention to
this
 subject, folks would probably reduce a little their
consumption
.
Secondly
, we should get better
meat
alternatives
. There are already more and more good vegan and vegetarian
alternatives
 on the market, but if we would get even more choices, and
people
 would be willing to try them out, we could definitely reduce
meat
consumption
 in society.
This
 would
also
 have a positive effect on global health. In conclusion, if we would educate
people
 about
meat
consumption
 problems and the positive effects it has on the environment and our health, and get more
meat
alternatives
,
meat
consumption
 could maybe get reduced in
this
 society.
This
 in return would help to reduce
land
 scarcity. And we shouldn't forget about the positive effects it would have on climate change.
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