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Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world's meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world's meat consumption? What kinds of problem might such mesures cause?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are starting to be vegetarian or even vegan, which has not only a positive impact on the carbon footprint but
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 on
land
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 use.
Meat
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 production needs much more
land
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 than crop production because for the animals we need the
land
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 to grow the crops that will afterwards be given to the animals, which
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 need a lot of space for their living. It is
therefore
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 agreed that
meat
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consumption
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 should be enormously reduced. In
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 I will analyse the educational impact and the vegetarian
alternatives
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 to
meat
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.
First
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 of all,
people
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 need to get proper education about
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 subject.
People
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 need to be educated about the current problems, in order to start caring about them and changing their eating behaviour.
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, many
people
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 don't even know about the problems of
meat
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 production, so we can't blame them for eating
meat
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 if they like the taste of it. If society would put more attention to
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 subject, folks would probably reduce a little their
consumption
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.
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, we should get better
meat
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alternatives
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. There are already more and more good vegan and vegetarian
alternatives
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 on the market, but if we would get even more choices, and
people
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 would be willing to try them out, we could definitely reduce
meat
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consumption
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 in society.
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 would
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 have a positive effect on global health. In conclusion, if we would educate
people
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 about
meat
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consumption
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 problems and the positive effects it has on the environment and our health, and get more
meat
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alternatives
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,
meat
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consumption
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 could maybe get reduced in
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 society.
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 in return would help to reduce
land
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 scarcity. And we shouldn't forget about the positive effects it would have on climate change.
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