In their advertising, business nowaday usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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recent years, advertising
method
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has been changed. In fact, businesses are focusing to present their
products
new. Changing procedures might be negative or positive. From a psychological point of view, there are lots of methods to introduce goods.
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way that companies illustrate their
products
can affect people deeply.
furthermore
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for clients is one of the significant
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to encourage them to buy.
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, these acts are persuading
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customers
coustomers
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customers
to think that, there are new
products
.
Although
some new versions of
products
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not
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the market for
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period of time.
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technologies
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, many
products
are ,as same as, each
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.
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lets
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consider mobile phones ,
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famous brands like
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and Samsung , are having
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quality.
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them with their old versions, we will discover that there
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not
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a
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real
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if any of them. So I can
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mention that
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buying new versions of most
products
is money wasting. If I had had
this
view before , I would not have bought iPhone 13. To sum up , I strongly believe that , the negative impact of presenting
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of many companies in
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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