Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Today, it is unacceptable that
people
have less time
spending
towards Replace the word
spent
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
. Not spending sufficient
amount of Add an article
a sufficient
time
have
different reasons and causes for Correct subject-verb agreement
has
people
and society. The following essay will elaborate regarding
the aforementioned points with examples.
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on
Firstly
, people
are busy with their daily schedules. As the world is developing in
a rapid pace the job market and business grow gradually Change preposition
at
as a result
people
do not have time
for other activities
. Thus
, in the past people
used to work during the day
under the given 7.5 hour period but nowadays they spend whole
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the whole
a whole
day
working towards goals. Secondly
, with the
technological Correct article usage
apply
advancements
individuals focus more on Add a comma
,advancements
internet
and social media, Add an article
the internet
hence
the number of people
liking towards
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apply
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
has reduced. Especially, young children, once they come home straight away they scroll down the web or search Change preposition
for gossips
gossips
, Fix the agreement mistake
gossip
in
despite Change preposition
apply
this
was not the normal procedure of
children but with the advent of Change preposition
for
technology
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,technology
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
was
put apart from their lives. As an example, according to Change the verb form
were
a
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apply
research
95% of Add a comma
,research
people
are not having a
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apply
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activity
, Fix the agreement mistake
activities
where
the other 5% of Correct word choice
while
people
are older
generation where they still continue their Add an article
an older
the older
activities
from the past. So, the interest humans have one hobbies
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hobby
are
reducing drastically Correct subject-verb agreement
is
day
by day
when the younger generation get
adapted to the new routines in the world.
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gets
In contrast
, there are many effects of the above mentioned
cause. Starting with, one of the main Add a hyphen
above-mentioned
cause
of not having a Fix the agreement mistake
causes
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hobby
hobbie
is individuals will become more stressed. Hobbies are important for Correct your spelling
hobby
ones
life because they help to alleviate stress as they supply a feeling of both fulfilment and escapism. Change to a genitive case
one's
Therefore
, people
who are having
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stress
due to Wrong verb form
stressed
huge
load of work capacity daily will eventually fall down sick and most probably Change the article
a huge
they
tend to get anxiety or depression. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Moreover
, another reason that today most of
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apply
the
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people
in society face is obesity. This
has become a Correct your spelling
worldwide
world wide
issue since Correct your spelling
worldwide
the
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apply
people
are not devoted to do
a Change the verb form
doing
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hobby
hobbies
hobbie
in their life. To exemplify, most Correct your spelling
hobby
of
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apply
the
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people
sit down the whole day
to
while they are working or using social mediaChange preposition
apply
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, as a result,
as a result
the time
they have to do an activity is less, so eventually
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,eventually
people
face high obesity.
To conclude, it is up to individuals to choose a Add a hyphen
work-life
work life
balance and move away from technology and devote their Add a hyphen
work-life
time
for
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to
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
if not more are
more Unnecessary verb
apply
people
will get stress
and Wrong verb form
stressed
obesity
in future.Replace the word
obese
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