Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today, it is unacceptable that
people
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have less
time
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spending
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towards
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
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. Not spending
sufficient
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a sufficient
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amount of
time
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have
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has
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different reasons and causes for
people
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and society. The following essay will elaborate
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the aforementioned points with examples.
Firstly
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,
people
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are busy with their daily schedules. As the world is developing
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at
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a rapid pace the job market and business grow gradually
as a result
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people
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do not have
time
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for other
activities
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.
Thus
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, in the past
people
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used to work during the
day
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under the given 7.5 hour period but nowadays they spend
whole
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the whole
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day
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working towards goals.
Secondly
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, with
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technological
advancements
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,advancements
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individuals focus more on
internet
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the internet
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and social media,
hence
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the number of
people
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liking
towards
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apply
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
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has reduced. Especially, young children, once they come home straight away they scroll down the web or search
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for gossips
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gossips
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gossip
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,
in
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apply
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despite
this
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was not the normal procedure
of
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for
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children but with the advent of
technology
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,technology
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
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was
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put apart from their lives. As an example, according to
a
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apply
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research
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95% of
people
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are not having
a
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apply
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activity
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activities
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,
where
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while
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the other 5% of
people
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are
older
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an older
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generation where they still continue their
activities
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from the past. So, the interest humans have one
hobbies
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hobby
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are
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is
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reducing drastically
day
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by
day
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when the younger generation
get
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gets
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adapted to the new routines in the world.
In contrast
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, there are many effects of the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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cause. Starting with, one of the main
cause
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causes
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of not having a
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hobby
hobbie
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hobby
is individuals will become more stressed. Hobbies are important for
ones
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one's
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life because they help to alleviate stress as they supply a feeling of both fulfilment and escapism.
Therefore
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,
people
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who are
having
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stress
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stressed
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due to
huge
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a huge
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load of work capacity daily will eventually fall down sick and most probably
they
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apply
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tend to get anxiety or depression.
Moreover
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, another reason that today most
of
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apply
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the
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people
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in society face is obesity.
This
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has become a
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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issue since
the
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people
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are not devoted to
do
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doing
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a
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hobby
hobbies
hobbie
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hobby
in their life. To exemplify, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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sit down the whole
day
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to
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apply
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while they are working or using social media
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, as a result,
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as a result
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the
time
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they have to do an activity is less, so
eventually
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,eventually
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people
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face high obesity. To conclude, it is up to individuals to choose a
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work-life
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work life
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work-life
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balance and move away from technology and devote their
time
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for
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to
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leisure
lesuire
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leisure
activities
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if not more
are
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apply
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more
people
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will get
stress
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stressed
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and
obesity
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obese
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in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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