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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home,leisure, and work activities. Do the advantages of information technology outweigh the drawbacks?

Nowadays technological progress immensely affects
people
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’s lives and is rapidly squeezing into everyday
routine
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routines
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, touching home tasks, recreation activities and
work
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 environment. While one might consider
such
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 a tendency in modern society detrimental, the benefits of life reconstruction dominate over the drawbacks. What might be regarded as a clear disadvantage is data insecurity. There is a high possibility of the system malfunction which might lead to the leak of personal
information
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, passwords, passport and card data.
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,
these
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information
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 may happen to be in
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apply
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open access on the Internet or get into the hands of swindlers and scammers who might possibly try to deceive or extort money from a person. Another disadvantage is
complexity
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 of usage. Young
people
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 are more seasoned users of modern technical appliances,
what
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 can’t be said about the old generation. Technologies are being developed at
such
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 a quick pace, that it is difficult for elderly
people
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 to keep up with trends, let alone
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figure out how certain devices function. Turning to the positive aspects of
information
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 technology, there are several advantages of using it.
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 of all, it is a perfect way not only for entertainment, but
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 for communication, both in
professional
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the professional
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 field and personal purposes. Informational technologies allow
people
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 around the globe to get in touch, make decisions and solve a wide range of issues even at a distance.
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, it serves as an infinite resource of entertaining stuff for all generations whether it is a cartoon,
educational
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an educational
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 program or an online version of a complete collection of works by a certain author. What is more, with the help of modern technology
people
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 began to have more time
that
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which
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 has led to the growth of productivity and higher results in
tasks
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 performance.
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, with
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access to online
resources
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 there is no need anymore to borrow books
in
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 the library and spend hours
on
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looking for necessary
information
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 in the pile of new material.
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 the trend of prompt changes in many spheres of life due to
information
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 technology has certain negative aspects, the positive ones are more numerous and substantial.

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