In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In modern times, everything is changing and marriage is one of them. These days merger is about sharing
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responsibility equally between spouses to run a family together. I completely agree with the notion because expenses will be shared and trust will be more. To commence with,
wedding
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the wedding
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might be successful when couples equally share everything and don't put
burden
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the burden
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on one partner alone. To explain,
family
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the family
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can be run with both partners and they have to be invested equally.
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can't be the one taking care of the family single hand and
wife
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the wife
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isn't sharing a single penny for the family.
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, a group of students from Stanford University published the report that 72% of
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are running the family and doing all the expenses.
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, both should invest
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amount of money. To add more, trust and
bond
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in the relationship will get stronger.
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, mutual understanding and compatibility of the couples may increase in
such
a way that they can believe in each other for every work.
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way
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will be easy for them and they can keep personal goals aside and family will come
first
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A relationship
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Relationship
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should work parallelly and supportingly. To conclude, discuss with
partner
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your partner
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before taking any decision. To sum up, I am agreeing with the statement to share the
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responsibility
responsibilty
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responsibility
in each and every aspect of the work for the smooth functioning of marriage and family.
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