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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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More and more
people
 all around the world nowadays opt for a rental
home
 rather than their own house or flat. But why is that? Do
benefits
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 of
such
 an accommodation overweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of renting a
home
 and figure out the answer. Taking into consideration that the clients in the rental services, mostly, are those
people
 who do not have
a
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 financial opportunity to buy a
home
 or pay
mortgage
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the mortgage
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, the main benefit turns
to
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 be very obvious. Renting is the only chance for them to have
home
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a home
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 at all. What is more,
absence
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the absence
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 of responsibilities in front of the banks gives a unique opportunity to be absolutely free and move to another flat or even relocate to another continent immediately. Living in
the
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 era of constantly accelerating technological progress,
people
 have to be ready to adapt to
the
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new circumstances as fast as the world around
changes
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.
However
, while someone
appreciate
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freedom
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the freedom
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 the most, another prefers stability
that
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which
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 is not achievable
while
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when
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 they do not own the
home
 where they live. One more really significant disadvantage of renting
flat
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a flat
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, that,
however
, takes place not in every country, is the fact that not having
the
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a
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home
,
people
 in their old age risk
to stay
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 without any accommodation at all due to extremely low pensions. According to statistics, more than 50% of homeless
people
 in Russia are pensioners who merely cannot allow a rental flat or even a room. To sum up, not only is renting a
home
 a great alternative that gives
unforgettable
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 sense of freedom, but it
also
 can cause
the
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really tremendous problems
such
 as homelessness.
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