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some people believe that the aim of University education is to help graduates get better jobs others believe that are much wider benefits of University education for both individuals and Society discuss both views and give your opinion give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

#people #aim #university #education #graduates #jobs #individuals #society
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University
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education
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 is very helpful for our career ‚and to get the opportunity of occupations in good positions.
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‚ it is beneficial to society in many fields‚ in my opinion
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I consider a
university
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education
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 as a door which opens many chances to learn about many things that help you in life in different sides not only to get a job. some people think that studying at
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especially with a good quality educational system gives you many chances in
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 of jobs ‚ depending on your degrees ‚which determine your job‚
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: if you succeed in
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 and graduate that graduation certificate opens up prospects for a financially successful future‚ and make the way easy to get a job.
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 others believe that a
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education
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 is not only to get jobs ‚but
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 for the development of society‚ and lack of knowledge in many things about life ‚because we exchange ideas and help each other in difficulties‚ and that's what makes us a scientifically and humanly educated ‚
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 :when I go to
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 I learn more about coltures
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 my studies ‚and I really find myself comfortable that I know many foreign coltures‚
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 I can learn different languages from my colleges ‚which make me cultured  and how to handle with people from overseas countries.
University
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 is good for both sides‚ to search about job and to benefits the society but personally I see it as a way of spreading knowledge in society.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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