Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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that the main significant school

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history

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in secondary and primary

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. On one hand, science and technology are fascinating and

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subject

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in high school. Namely, physics, chemistry, and math are accurate sciences in the world.

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should know a lot of theorems, formulas and problems.

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questions. Adults should not show their opinions, they should follow only

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person

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from the lessons,using

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knowledge and write the answers.

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higher, but

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liked by

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many teenagers.

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for students, because our country develops

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history

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danger

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situations for

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life.

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World War happened in 20 century and after

government

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tried to develop

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and to change authority.

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history

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that

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consider that it is not true. Despite

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, science and technology are needed in secondary school, but every person chooses

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