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many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree ?

#food #drink #product #level #sugar #health #products #people
Today, many health issues have been caused due to the
consumption
 of high
level
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 of manufactured food and drink
products
 so to overcome
this
 problem, making the
prices
 high would make
the
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people
to
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consume less. I would certainly disagree with the statement. Making the
prices
 high is really a good idea but there
are
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 some set of
people
 who are below the poverty line and that kind of
people
 cannot afford
this foods
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this food
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.
Moreover
, sugary
products
 are the major reason but it is not the only reason, because today more
people
 do not have time to do physical workouts.
For instance
,
people
 who work in
IT
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the IT
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sectors
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, have to spend
their
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 vast sum of time
by
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sitting in front of
the
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computers.
However
, if we make the
prices
 for sugary
products
 high,
people
 will move to
the
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fast foods and
it
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which
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 is more harmful
for
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to
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 health. To overcome
this
 issue,
government
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the government
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 should make
the
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people
 more aware
about
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of
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 the
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overconsumption
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over
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overconsumption
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consumption
 of sugary
products
.
On the other hand
, building more gyms and making
it
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them
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 free of cost would encourage
the
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people
 to do physical exercise and keep their body fit.
Additionally
, making
the
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people
 aware
about
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of
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the
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a
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 balanced diet and how to follow them would help them to keep themselves away from
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overconsumption
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over
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overconsumption
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consumption
 of
high fat
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high-fat
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products
. In conclusion, making the
prices
 high for sugary
products
 is not a good idea and will not work as expected. Even though the
prices
 are high, still tempt
the
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people
 to buy so making
the
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people
 aware
about
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of
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of
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overconsumption
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over
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overconsumption
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consumption
 would be highly helpful.
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