Some people claim that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. While others think that they can establish a minority community instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The table provides information on the proportion of females in higher management in various businesses from 1975 to 2015.

 Overall, the female percentage of higher management in Eldan
Ltd
and Bamforth
Ltd
exhibited upward trends in the period given, whereas Finsbury
Ltd
showed a slight decline before climbing back. 

In 1975, Eldan
Ltd
only had 3% of women holding executive positions, and
this
number remained the same for 5 years. After that, the rate went up significantly to almost two-thirds (64%) by 2015, which was the greatest difference during 40 years in the three companies.
Likewise
, Bamforth
Ltd
was less than 1 in 10 at the beginning;
however
, in 2015 it showed a dramatic growth to over five times the proportion of upper positions for women in 1975. In terms of Finsbury
Ltd
, it can be seen that the percentage took the lead, at 16% when the period started, and decreased gradually by 2% in 1980, before increasing to over one-quarter at the end of the period, which came in
last
in 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adopt the local culture
  • integrate
  • social customs
  • mutual respect
  • cultural clashes
  • minority community
  • cultural diversity
  • emotional support
  • mental health
  • multicultural society
  • harmonious coexistence
  • heritage
  • social acceptance
  • cultural practices
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