Young people are leaving their home from rural areas to study at work in cities. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Most

of

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the

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young people are leaving their

home

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from

areas

because of

study

or work in cities. In my

opinion

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i

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believe that

this

initiative can bring about more problems for a person

compare

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to any advantages it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic

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benefits

benifits

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benefits

of moving away from

areas

for

study

or work.

First

of all,

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most of the villagers are dependent on agriculture. All most all the youths are seen to be unemployed despite being educated because there are no job opportunities in the

areas

.

on the other hand

,the cities have all kinds of facilities. Big mills,factories trades and workplaces to easy get a quality job easily. Can it is easy to become

self dependent

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in cities

.

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Secondly

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schools are

areas

are limited to

secondary

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level.Many young students drop out of education due to

lack

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of facilities after passing the secondary examination. But the education system in the city is very good, they do not face

face

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any

problem

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.

Therefore

, most of the youth are leaving their locality and moving to the city to make themselves skilled and established.

Nevertheless

, despite the advantages above,

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think young people are facing some serious

drawback

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to

leave

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on

areas

.

Firstly

, urban life is very messy

however

the trend of politics is very high there,many younger join political parties when they get better,

life

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is ruined by corruption and bribery while doing politics.

Secondly

, leaving their local, family and friends they feel lonely in a completely new environment. Being socially

backward

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moral is lost.Life is ruined by falling into chaos.

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,

i

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grew up in

village

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but now

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am in town to do IELTS. I feel

like

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very lonely,

because

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of

this

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am not

concentrate

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my

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study

. To conclude

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think politics is a bad influence and a result of being socially isolated

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for

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far

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outweigh

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any of the minor benefits that could result from moving

areas

to

city

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for

study

or work.