Young people are leaving their home from rural areas to study at work in cities. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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young people are leaving their
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initiative can bring about more problems for a person
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to any advantages it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic
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most of the villagers are dependent on agriculture. All most all the youths are seen to be unemployed despite being educated because there are no job opportunities in the
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,the cities have all kinds of facilities. Big mills,factories trades and workplaces to easy get a quality job easily. Can it is easy to become
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schools are
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level.Many young students drop out of education due to
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of facilities after passing the secondary examination. But the education system in the city is very good, they do not face
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, most of the youth are leaving their locality and moving to the city to make themselves skilled and established.
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, despite the advantages above,
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think young people are facing some serious
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, urban life is very messy
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the trend of politics is very high there,many younger join political parties when they get better,
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is ruined by corruption and bribery while doing politics.
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, leaving their local, family and friends they feel lonely in a completely new environment. Being socially
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moral is lost.Life is ruined by falling into chaos.
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but now
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am in town to do IELTS. I feel
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think politics is a bad influence and a result of being socially isolated
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any of the minor benefits that could result from moving
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