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Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes. Should these new homes be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside?

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The quantity of
people
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 increases every day,
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 the governments of many countries need a lot of accommodation. A
such
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 problem can be tackled by one of both options either building new homes inside old cities or constructing additional districts in the suburb. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss it and explain why we should build new
houses
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 in the countryside.
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 of all, many countries try to renovate their cities to provide
people
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 with additional accommodation,
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 they construct new
houses
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 in places where are old buildings.
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, it is connected with a lot of difficulties
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 as noise,
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and
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dirty and closed roads in the cities.
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, it can be dangerous for children who are very curious and want to walk near
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the place
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place
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places
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 where
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building
bulding
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bullying
 happens.
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 constructing inside
city
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the city
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 is more expensive, that cause
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citizens need to pay more than they can.
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 governments decided to extend a suburb, due to the fact that it is an excellent opportunity to provide a huge number of
people
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 with flats and
houses
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.
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, powers in my home city use the programme of supporting
people
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. My city suggested buying a flat in the countryside with a pleasant discount,
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 the territory of it extended at a fast pace. In conclusion, because of population growth countries must increase the number of
houses
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. In light of the mentioned problem, the best solvation for both the governments and citizens will be to construct new homes in the countryside.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban sprawl
  • Overcrowding
  • Sustainable development
  • Greener living spaces
  • Economic boost
  • Public services
  • Planned communities
  • Housing affordability
  • Social cohesion
  • Amenities
  • Cultural integration
  • Ecosystem
  • Alleviate
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