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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 day and age,
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 hold conflicting views about the admission of
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 to
universities
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. While a number of
people
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 believe that
students
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 who have good results deserve to offer a place in higher
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 compared to others, I would argue that
universities
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 should provide places for all
students
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 of different ages and learning backgrounds. There are various reasons why
people
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 believe that
universities
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 should only offer curricula for young, high-performance
students
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.
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 of all, young
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 are thinking, creative, sharper, learning faster, adapting to new environments more quickly, and acquiring knowledge faster. Not only that, when they have flying
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, their good performances indicate their competence, and their background knowledge is very good.
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, college is not for most
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, it's an academy-deep curriculum, so it's not about everybody.
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, once a good graduate will bring
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 to the school that they used to attend. In spite of these arguments, I believe that college is a door
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 open to all, regardless of age or degree.
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 with, every student has their own abilities in learning different kinds of field, they could not able to perform well at school in necessary subjects but I opine that the majority of
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 can make sure that they would perform in higher
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 as badly as in lower grade schools. Because everyone has a right to
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, to have an opportunity to develop, to advance their own value.
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, they contribute to higher
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 by everyone studying at the same time to build a more developed, civilized, and modern society.
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 older
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 might not have many abilities in acquire
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 knowledge because of their family condition, they are not able to join university when they are younger, it would be unfair if those
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 would like to attend
universities
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 when they have a chance. In conclusion, while it is true that
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 should give chances to good and younger
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, I would completely agree with those who believe that
students
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 of different ages and learning assessments could be able to have a place in
universities
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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