Some people think that because some children find subjects like mathematics and philosophy tough, they ought to be made optional instead of compulsory. To what extend do you agree?

Some
children
find out that mathematics and
philosophy
are tough, and due to
this
statement some people assume mathematical and social sciences should be optional
instead
of obligatory. I absolutely disagree with that statement owing to subjects that are hard to understand and comprehend being beneficial and rewarding for the mental health and development of the brain's cognitive parts.
First
and foremost, solving and addressing mathematical problems could help out the human brain cells which are called neurons to improve and develop their ability to work and transport electrical impulses during their body, from dendrites to axons. If your neurons work well at right time,
for instance
, in the exams, you will feel ecstatic. Based on cognitive sciences and psychology, maths and statistics and all quantitative sciences assist and improve brain activity and secrete hormones like serotonin which makes you happy.
Secondly
,social subjects could aid
children
to develop and expand their behaviour and make them well-behaved. If you ask me,
philosophy
is the study of
life
in a sophisticated way. It could help you to solve and tackle your problem in a right and opt way and could help you find the meaning of
life
. If you study and research in the field of
philosophy
, you will gain great skills and expand all aspects of your
life
correctly. As a same as adults,
children
could benefit from studying
philosophy
. They should not give up because something is hard,
life
is full of learning and they would study from them,
however
; sometimes they did not
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how to tackle their issues.
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subject learn them crucial and vitally important subjects to learn. If
this
subject will been optional
instead
of
mendatory
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mandatory
,
children
would
hurt
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in every
aspects
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of their mental and practical
life
. By far and large,
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children
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children
may sometimes grunt
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