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Some people think that students should play more team sports, such as football and volleyball, rather than individual sports, such as running and swimming. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #students #team #sports #football #volleyball
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that many
point
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 out the majority of youngsters should participate in much more game sports especially football and volleyball
instead
 of playing jogging and swimming. Personally, I tend to consider
this
 point of view
is
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well grounded
however
 according to some, we should not ignore the fact that solo
sport
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activities
 should be more popular among
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teenagers
teenegers
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teenagers
 which is beneficial for adolescents.
First
 and foremost, it is well-known that the major individuals argue that
students
 who have a longing to do
sport
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activities
, play lonely more games. It is undeniable that
such
type
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 of sports assist teenagers to stay healthy if they do
it
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 daily.
For example
, in Korea most
of
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students
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the students
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 always do morning exercises
thus
, they feel
themselves
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energetic whole day long and it is able to stop
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the developing
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developing
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of
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heart
deceases
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diseases
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.
Moreover
, some
sport
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activities
 can
be
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cause to become rich
such
 as golf which is the most high priced
activities
 all over the world. Take
Mr.
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 Tiger as an example,
Mr.
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 Tiger was born
in
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poor
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the poor
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 family
however
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, when he grew up he was one of the most popular golf
player
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 and the richest person in the world.
On the other hand
, it can be argued that
the
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teamwork
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team work
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teamwork
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 has some negative impact on young
students
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students'
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 health.
This
 is to say that if they play football with close friends , they will
hurt
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.
For instance
, according to research, most
of
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people
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the people
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 broke their legs during
the
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football match. In conclusion, having
weighted
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 everything mentioned into account in our final analysis , we can say that most
of
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students
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the students
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 should play more single games rather than taking part in teams.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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