Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
In recent years, some
people
argue that the increasing prevalence of violent contents
on Fix the agreement mistake
content
TV
and computer games
has a devastating impact on society
while others contend that those affect the way people
think and behave. In my perspective, this
tendency both adversely
damages and influences individuals and Change the adverb
adverse
whole
Add an article
the whole
society
.
There are multiple ways in which the popularity of violence nowadays há an adverse effect on society
. First
and foremost, this
trend results in higher levels of crime
cases which pose a dire threat to all the residents. Replace the word
criminal
This
is because people
are exposed to aggressive contents
that often have a big impression on them and lead to their imitation which is a challenge for officers to deal with their actions. Another significant drawback is that the prevalence of violence is equivalent to less compassion, love and caring. Since Fix the agreement mistake
content
people
are usually obsessed and appealed by those contents
, they tend to become less interested and care about normal things happening around the community and ignore the miserable situations of others. For example
, when they are walking and watching action movies, they hardly can put down their phone to help someone who has just had an accident on the roads
.
The increasing trend of aggressive Fix the agreement mistake
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behaviors
on Change the spelling
behaviours
TV
or games
bring
many negative impacts on each citizen as well. Change the verb form
brings
Firstly
, the increasing time spent on
watching Change preposition
apply
TV
programs or playing games
can lead to multiple mental and physical health problems. This
could be explained by the fact that those programs are designed and produced with a high level of addiction to satisfy the viewers' needs
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need
of
violence. Change preposition
for
For instance
, when people
are getting addicted to action movies, it would be extremely challenging for them to get rid of this
tendency which can have an adverse effect on their eyes and minds. Moreover
, this
trend could weaken the relationships between people
since they often allocate a larger amount of time to immerse themselves in those stuff
rather than interacting with others.
In conclusion, in my Change the determiner
that stuff
opinion
there are numerous adverse impacts that the increasing tendency of high levels of violent Add a comma
,opinion
contents
in Fix the agreement mistake
content
TV
programs and computer games
could have on both individuals and the
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apply
society
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite