In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving exisitng public transport. Discuss both views and give your own pinion.

It is an undeniable fact that in
this
contemporary epoch
people
love to explore new cities with their family
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reasonable
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price
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. Few
people
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it is necessary to spend
money
on
train
and they try to give good service to passengers whilst other thinks that
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spending
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spending
money
on public
transport
is more suitable than spending on
rail
lines to make trai
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faster . I would like to put forth my views and opinion in the conclusion .
Firstly
,
people
like to travel with their kith and
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and love to visit
new
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place
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.
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,
train
services
is
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the most
afforable
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affordable
service in every country and by
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few
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money
on
rail
tracks it will help ample to
people
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time .
Furthermore
,
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can offer ample
of
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things
compare
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to other
transport
system
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and
their
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is much safety in
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the train
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train
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trains
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and nowadays
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every
evry
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every
country is trying to make
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rail
track an
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electric
electeic
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electronic
track.
In Addition
, constructing a
rail
line is becoming the
first
priority because of
increasing
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money
in
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petrol and
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diesel
desiel
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diesel
and now constructing a line is much easier than before nowadays, it can be built with help of machines and
their
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is no risk of life.
For Instance
, Recently India has made a metro line which is quite
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affordable
afforable
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affordable
and made with help of huge
machineries
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and
myrais
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myriads
myriad
of
people
can seat
in
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one
train
.
However
, we seldom give a thought to
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over
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side
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essay . We can not say no to public
transport
because it is
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most used transportation service . Foremostly ,
every
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can not go inside the city with help of
terminales
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terminals
so public
transport
like Bus , Taxi ,
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should
be improve
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more
instant
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of making other things more comfortable . Afterwards, using
bus
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can help
middle class
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people
to go
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of
city
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with
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fair
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price and they
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don't
dont
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don't
have to walk
more
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any more
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.
Last
but not the least,
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Goverment
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Government
of every
states
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is improving state
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highway
highways
hihway
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highway
roads and public
transport
roads for better comfort . To cite an
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, Ahemdabad
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Goverment
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government
is
making
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a different route for BRTS Bus so
people
do not have to wait in
traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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and they can reach
at
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their location in
couple
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of
money
. The seemingly inexorable debate about construction can keep on going.
Nevertheless
, showing deep
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reverence
revernce
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reverence
for all aspects and observing finer
nounce
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nuance
of the matter mentioned above . I espouse the notion of
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supporting
supportion
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supporting
both
rail
track and public road construction in
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way
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-speed trains
  • intercity travel
  • carbon footprint
  • economic activity
  • construction phase
  • public transport systems
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • cost-effective
  • infrastructure
  • productivity
  • sustainable urban environment
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