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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

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History
 has always been an unavoidable subject for
students
 in their school curriculum,
however
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this
 has been debatable for
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quiet
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 some time whether it is really necessary for
students
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the
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past events. People have been arguing with the school syllabus to include practical
subjects
 like science and technology more
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 the kids' curriculum. In
this
 essay I will hereby state my opinion on the same.
History
 has been a part of the 4 major
subjects
 based on which the
students
 are graded for the
next
 grade,
However
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 some parents argue that schools should not focus much on
history
, the reason being, As it is already easily accessible on
internet
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the internet
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students
 do not need to spend years learning the dates and the events from the past which might not actively help them with their goals.
Instead
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 practical
subjects
 like science and technology should be the major focus along with literature. While, on one
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 it is important for children to understand the
history
 of the land
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the
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live
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 on and study the culture they follow,
However
this
 can easily be learnt on
internet
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. Schools sure should focus more on
subjects
 like mathematics, science, economics,
finance
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 and
its
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 practical implications as
such
.
For
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 the financial literacy rate of Indian
students
 is only 24%, which means only 24% of the youth in India
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 how to manage their money and balance between income, expenditures, saving and investments. To say learning historic dates and the stories of the British invasion and freedom does not help young people to balance their life. Schools are responsible for shaping a child's future and youth,
hence
subjects
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history
 can
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 be omitted once a child reaches a particular age, from where they need to learn how to deal with the real world
instead
 of learning historic dates.
Therefore
 my opinion has been biased towards the
later
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 argument, where
students
 should be taught more
of
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the
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hands-on
subjects
 than
history
.
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