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The self-driving cars is getting popular in the world. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #world
Today, experts agree that in the coming years,
cars
 will be self-driving. The main reason for
this
 is the development of artificial intelligence. We should welcome
this
 because it prevents accidents and saves many lives. On the one hand, self-driving
cars
 have been developing very rapidly in recent years. Driving vehicles can move from one place to another without human action. Self-driving
cars
 mean that
cars
 will become more commonplace for humans as easily as humans can control computers.
For example
,
Tesla
 has self-driving features and within a few
years
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Tesla
 will announce that all of its
cars
 will be self-driving.
On the other hand
, some people may not like it, but we should be happy to receive these
cars
. Because it saves people's lives for some reason. The reason is that some drivers can fall asleep at the wheel or drive under the influence of alcohol, which can lead to various unpleasant consequences.
For example
, if we take the
Tesla
 car as I mentioned above, according to the data,
Tesla
 can cover a lot of distance with one accident. In conclusion, the development of self-driving
cars
 will become the new standard because it will prevent various unfortunate events in human life.
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