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Social networking in the workplace has more advantages than disadvantages. Do you agree with this statement?

#workplace
Nowadays, social platforms are becoming very popular,
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 among youngsters. I
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 disagree that those social networks are beneficial while employees use them during work
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social platforms in the company, increases the risk of getting disturbed by the feeds that the person receives.As a consequence, the employee's productivity is automatically reduced, as he/she accords the attention is distributed to the message or news received as well as put aside the task that has to be accomplished.
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 encourages
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virtual communication because the staff
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find
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 to write a message rather than to go personally to talk to their colleague.
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job satisfaction in a certain place, as a person cannot see the other's facial
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 the face to face communication in the favor of online socialization encountered
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different
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 and misunderstandings between their members.
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the company his/her social platform
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 feels more depressed and losses the zeal of working.
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when they see photos or written passages
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 their online page. in conclusion, scrolling the
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 time has a detrimental effect
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