Some people believe citizens should be allowed to carry handguns in order to protect themselves, while others think this can lead to many social security problems in the society . What's your opinion ?

Some
people
think natives should be permitted to carry handguns in order to keep safe themselves, while others think
this
can lead to many communal security problems in
the
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society
. I think it is really wrong for
people
to think like that. I do not think
people
need to carry a gun to protect themselves in our
society
. I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there are certainly
people
who think like that
our
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society
today. On the one hand, their opinion is correct . Because they want to carry a gun to protect themselves from the suspicious
people
around
us
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them
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. If there are
people
who are dangerous for their lives, they can certainly carry a pistol. But my personal opinion is that I am against
people
carrying handguns.The reason is that in our
society
every citizen is protected by the right persons and every person can walk safely in our
country
. But after the years of our independence ,
people
started to feel calm and peaceful.
That is
why I do not want
people
carrying harm and harm to each other, so I disagree. I am a supporter of
peaceful
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living of every person in our
country
. May there always be peace and joy in our
country
,
may
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all young
people
and adults always be happy. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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there is no need for anyone to carry a pistol in our
country
, because the most peaceful
country
is our magical
country
, Uzbekistan.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • empowerment
  • self-defense
  • deter
  • inadvertently
  • escalation
  • tragic outcomes
  • foster
  • conflict resolution
  • false sense of security
  • root causes
  • poverty
  • education
  • mental health support
  • law enforcement
  • community-based strategies
  • responsible gun ownership
  • stringent
  • background checks
  • training
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