Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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migrating
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different countries and community's
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do not have
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countries and metro
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the student
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student
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students
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moving
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to Canada because
their
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better
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and good
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lifestyle
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life style
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for
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international students.
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role
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managing. It is
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task to manage all
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people
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to live together harmoniously.
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people
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other countries or
cities
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as
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free of charge health care
facilities
, educational
facilities
and many more.
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government
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people
free
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service of health care and
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scholarships
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to
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international students. In conclusion,
people
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who
moving
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to metro
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and abroad for
their
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better future that the
government
should support
in
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every
facilities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
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  • equal opportunities
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