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Nowadays, modern people are willing to keep themselves fit. Although, many people think that government making laws regarding nutritious food. Other believe that people should take of health is their responsibility. I personally agree later point of view and my explanation given in ensuing paragraphs.

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Introduction
Nowadays, modern
people
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 are willing to keep themselves fit.
Although
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, many
people
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 think that
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government
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the government
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 making
laws
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 regarding nutritious
food
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.
Other
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Others
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 believe that
people
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 should take of
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health
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their health
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is
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as
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 their responsibility. I personally agree
later
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latter
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 point of view and my explanation given in
ensuing
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the ensuing
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 paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
To being with, these days
health
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 issues
has
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have
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 been increased because of
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a
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am
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a
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 healthy diet.
The life
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Life
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 gonna
to
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too
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 fast and
people
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 do not have enough time to
prepared
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prepare
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food
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 at home.
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,
people
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 eat
out-side
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outside
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food
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 and pre-prepared
food
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,
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,
people
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's
health
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 problems
has
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have
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 been
rise
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risen
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. So,
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government
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the government
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 should
making
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make
be making
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laws
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 for
people
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 that eat nutritious
food
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. The authorities make
laws
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 for unnutritious
food
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 or unhealthy
food
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 banned and less selling in the market.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, In some countries
also
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 make
laws
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of
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for
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 nutritious
food
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.
Although
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, it
laws
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 not properly worked.
For example
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, the
government
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 of
united
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the united
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 kingdom make
laws
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 which
given
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give
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 nutrient charts and diet schedule for
citizen
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a citizen
the citizen
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 to make healthy,
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However
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however
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, it is not working
to
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for
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the
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apply
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everyone. Because
,
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apply
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 everyone lives in different
life style
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lifestyle
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Therfore
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Therefore
,
people
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 Can't follow
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this
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this law
these laws
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laws
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.
Moreover
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, It is your
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responsibility
responsibities
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responsibility
 to how to keep fit Your body.
People
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 have different types of body
structure
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structures
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that
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and
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 diet is related to their body structure.
Conclusion
In Conclusion, The
government
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 helps to reduce
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the selling
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selling
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swelling
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 of
in
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apply
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unhealthy
food
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 which creates
health
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 problems. Whereas, it is
personal
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a personal
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 choice and
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 how to maintain their fitness.
Therefore
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, my opinion on the
later
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latter
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 point of view.

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