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Nowadays, modern people are willing to keep themselves fit. Although, many people think that government making laws regarding nutritious food. Other believe that people should take of health is their responsibility. I personally agree later point of view and my explanation given in ensuing paragraphs.

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Nowadays, modern
people
 are willing to keep themselves fit.
Although
, many
people
 think that
government
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the government
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 making
laws
 regarding nutritious
food
.
Other
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Others
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 believe that
people
 should take of
health
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their health
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is
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as
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 their responsibility. I personally agree
later
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latter
show examples
 point of view and my explanation given in
ensuing
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the ensuing
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 paragraphs. To being with, these days
health
 issues
has
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have
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 been increased because of
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a
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am
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a
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 healthy diet.
The life
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Life
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 gonna
to
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too
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 fast and
people
 do not have enough time to
prepared
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prepare
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food
 at home.
Therefore
,
people
 eat
out-side
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outside
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food
 and pre-prepared
food
,
As a result
,
people
's
health
 problems
has
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have
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 been
rise
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risen
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. So,
government
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the government
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 should
making
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make
be making
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laws
 for
people
 that eat nutritious
food
. The authorities make
laws
 for unnutritious
food
 or unhealthy
food
 banned and less selling in the market.
On the other hand
, In some countries
also
 make
laws
of
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for
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 nutritious
food
.
Although
, it
laws
 not properly worked.
For example
, the
government
 of
united
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the united
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 kingdom make
laws
 which
given
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give
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 nutrient charts and diet schedule for
citizen
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a citizen
the citizen
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 to make healthy,
However
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however
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, it is not working
to
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for
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the
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apply
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everyone. Because
,
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apply
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 everyone lives in different
life style
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lifestyle
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Therfore
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Therefore
,
people
 Can't follow
this
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this law
these laws
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laws
.
Moreover
, It is your
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responsibility
responsibities
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responsibility
 to how to keep fit Your body.
People
 have different types of body
structure
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structures
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that
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and
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 diet is related to their body structure. In Conclusion, The
government
 helps to reduce
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the selling
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selling
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swelling
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 of
in
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apply
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unhealthy
food
 which creates
health
 problems. Whereas, it is
personal
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a personal
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 choice and
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 how to maintain their fitness.
Therefore
, my opinion on the
later
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latter
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 point of view.
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