some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of diffrent cultures and ages toghether. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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try to make a good connection
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people
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other countries and they believe
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can help us to start a relationship between cultures and
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support
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idea. For my
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,reason I can say that listening to foreign
music
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is helping us to know which kind of instrument is popular or how is most peoples mood in other nations.
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Latin
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is mostly happy songs and the guitar is the main instrument played in their
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. For the
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reason for defending
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idea
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I point to the lyrics. When
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foreign music
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music
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is playing most
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want to know the meaning and be aware of the story of that singing.Those words are good samples of how citizens talk and behave in their country and how they describe a similar subject compared to other origins.
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Hip hop
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is popular in every nation but in some
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singers use bad words which is not acceptable in other cultures. The way a singer tells a fairy tale to describe the love between two lovers helps us to understand their culture.
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whit different ages have
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of
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. In my ,country most adolescents love modern
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but older ones prefer classical
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so
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difference may help everyone to understand other eras' moods. To finish my descriptions I can conclude that
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is a good tool to make a worldwide bond between nations and ages.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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