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Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#success #business #promotion
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, advertising, by promoting and marketing,is the key
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success
succes
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success
to
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 any business. I
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completely
completly
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completely
 agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, using
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different
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different
diffrent
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different
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mean
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 to
expond
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expand
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 the features of the
product
 directly to the
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customer
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customer
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costumer
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customer
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, increase significantly
the
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sales. The buyer gains information about the item through the company itself, which encourages the person to buy it.
for example
, the
iphone
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iPhone
annualy
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annually
 promotes the new
up date
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update
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 phone, via
internet
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,
although
 the main
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characteristics
characters
characterists
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characteristics
 are the same,
still
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 it
pursuades
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persuades
iphone
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iPhone
addicters
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addiction
addicts
 to purchase it.
moreover
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 the vivid and vibrant
colors
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colours
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 used in promotions, have a visual impact on the viewer,
as
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 a result,
this
impregnant
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pregnant
 image pushes him/her to buy it.So the financial expenditure subsidized in the adverts,have the scope to boost the income of the company. Needless to say,
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firms that invest in commercial adv have nearly 50% more
revenues
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 that the ones that use word of mouth.
In addition
, by launching a
product
, the brand gains popularity among the clients.
this
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,
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 people recognise the brand name and the
product
 by simply looking at the item.
For instance
, the channel bags
are well know
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,for
its
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their
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 model and
colors
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, which are lady's
favorite
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favourite
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bag
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bags
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. In conclusion, the promotion of a
product
 is a
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win win
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 situation for both the company and the customer.
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