The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over whether increasing the
fuel’s
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price
is the best strategy
to
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addressing the global environmental issue. I do not consider myself
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an advocate of
this
idea.
With
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a shadow of a doubt, raising the cost of fuel is not the optimal approach to
deal
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with the
environment
. The demand for oil is inelastic due to the fact that almost vehicles run on gasoline, so even if the
price
were ever-increasing, people would still want to consume it.
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although
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Vietnam’s government dramatically increased the
price
of gasoline, people are still running to buy it since getting to work and school is a daily requirement,
which
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the number of vehicles used on a daily basis is not dropped by the
price
rise in fuel.
Thus
, it is ineffective to preserve the
environment
by raising petrol costs. While
an
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ineffective impact of the increase in
the
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fuel’s
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price
is widely acknowledged, there are several intensive alternatives to address environmental issues. Because hybrid cars driven by renewable energy do not release greenhouse gases, they have no impact on environmental air quality.
For instance
, Vinfast
is
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a leading car
make
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in Vietnam has an environmentally friendly tram system, which merely serves people's transportation demands without negatively impacting the
environment
's air quality.
As a result
, using electric vehicles is one of the strategies to reduce CO2 emissions and so save the
environment
. In conclusion, increasing the
price
of fuel is not the best method to solve the world's environmental
issue
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and having myriads of tactics to solve the
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dilemma.
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