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In many countries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as paper, glass, and cans. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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It is true,
people
 produce a lot of garbage together, and in some
countries
, they do not recycle material
that is
 still useful
such
 as cantons, bottles and jars. The mean reasons those
countries
 struggling are not collecting are the cost and problems with collecting the
materials
.
Firstly
, the cost to collect reusable
materials
 is very high. It is cheaper to bring it to the dump yard than
instead
 processing it as recycling
materials
.
Otherwise
, they need to be picked up and bring it to the recycling distribution
centre
, and at the
centre
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 all the
materials
 need to be processed. A solution can be money motivated the
people
 with money and
this
 way they can bring recycled material to the
centre
. If they put a fee on
this
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these
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materials
people
 are more willing to separate them and bring them to the collecting
centre
.
Secondly
, not all
countries
 have the resources to separate
materials
 and reuse the
materials
 in new products.
This
 is a worldwide problem because those
countries
 use all the trees and get the
materials
 out of the ground still there is nothing left in the future.
Therefore
,
countries
 need to help invest in other
countries
 to get those machines.
Otherwise
, they will be no effect in the long term for a better world. In conclusion, there is a lot of material
that is
 reusable. To collect all the recycling
people
 need to be motivated with money by putting fees on the bottles and plastic, and
also
 it is a worldwide problem where
countries
 need to invest to make it possible for other
countries
.
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