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With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspaper will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true, with the arrival of the
internet
,
people
 are less interested
reading
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 a
newspaper
. The
news
 on the
internet
 is becoming faster than the
newspaper
 on the
door mat
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.
Therefore
, I think
the
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paper
newspaper
 will no longer exist in the future, but
instead
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the
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online newspapers will always exist.
Firstly
, today,
people
 want to be informed quickly, and they do not prefer to wait a day to get the
information
. For, example reading about a fire in a townhouse a day later makes it old
news
. After all,
this
information
 is immediately available on the
internet
 with a local website. It does not mean the
newspaper
 will disappear because the paper
newspaper
 makes place for the online
newspaper
.
People
 only need to pay for an online membership to read the
articles
.
Secondly
, the reason that
people
 are still
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interested
interrested
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interested
 to read a
newspaper
because
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 the
articles
 are
well informed
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. Nowadays, there is a lot of
information
 and
articles
 on the
internet
 that are false or misinformed. It is up
on
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 the reader to decide what is reliable.
Articles
 in
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 are more reliable because those
articles
 are written normally written by
well educated
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well-educated
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 journalists because it is their job to give
honestly
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news
 with more accurate background
information
. In conclusion, in the
future
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 there will be no more paper
newspaper
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newspapers
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 because it takes
to
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 long the inform the readers.
Instead
, the readers
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read
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reed
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read
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 their
news
 online with an online
newspaper
.
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